Yes I can.
A normal production is divided in beats and bars.
It starts with an intro and a build up to a chorus or a break.
Your track just starts and keeps on going and going.
A track should tell a story.
I’ll advise you to listen to more trance tracks and try to understand how they are build.
Listen to this track for example:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MyHMFndlFiQ&feature=related
Solar Stone – Seven Cities.
Notice the track is made out of (about) 30 second pieces.
Listen to the track and hear the story.
Bart
Van:
Verzonden: zondag 21 september 2008 20:42
Aan:
Onderwerp: Re: [Dance Paradise] Can I have feedback on this trance song I made?
Can I ask how the production is odd? I want to change it so it sounds better. I'll mind the telephone voice but I'm most interested in what you say is "odd production." Can you say why?
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Subject: RE: [Dance Paradise] Can I have feedback on this trance song I made?
Hi Ryan,
The track is some what odd produced.
Also the telephone voice destroys the break completely.
The melody is to much and keeps running over and over.
It's 'in your face' so to speak and almost annoying at the end.
Not a track I would gladly listen for the second time.
Just my 2 ct.
Bart
Van: dance-paradise@ yahoogroups. com [mailto: dance-paradise@ yahoogroups. com ] Namens Ryan Franzak
Verzonden: zondag 21 september 2008 18:22
Aan: dance-paradise@ yahoogroups. com
Onderwerp: [Dance Paradise] Can I have feedback on this trance song I made?
Hi everybody, my name is Ryan and I am an electronic musician.
Recently I made my first trance song ever. I don't mean to spam here but I was wondering if I could get some feedback on it.
You can find my song on
myspace.com/ vesl
Please let me know what you think. I want serious input like it's good or its boring, or its needs this or don't touch it. Can you guys just give it a listen real quick. I promise it is not a time waster, I worked really hard on it!
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